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‘This doesn’t seem secluded.” Bridget’s eyes see a lot full of cars.
“Maybe the beach is bigger than we think.” Bill can’t believe the hour drive ends here.”Let’s go look at the ocean and those stars. Brighter than any where on the coast!”
“Yeah, that’s what a website said. Isolated too. Let’s get it over with.” Brigdet uses her total waste of time voice.
The edge of the parking lot leads to a trail that snakes down a sheer cliff. The Sun plunges into red waves below. Soft lights illuminates the way. The surf calls out and draws like a magnet. A soft breeze sings in a low voice.
About halfway down Bill reaches to touch Bridget’s right arm. “Down there. See the candles. There’s got to be fifty people in that circle.”
“Bill, we are out of here! I don’t want to know and don’t want them seeing us either.” Bridget stops in her tracks.
“Too late.” Bill points out the circle changing shape.
Written as part of a challenge calledflash fiction for aspiring writers, details available at https://flashfictionforaspiringwriters.wordpress.com/2017/06/19/fffaw-challenge-week-of-june-20-2017/
An interesting take on the photo
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Thank you very much.
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Loved this.
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Thank you. Moody is everything in these
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Nice story , Mark
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Thank you very much. 😀
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Most interesting tale Mark…nicely done.
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Thank you for the kind words. 🙂
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I don’t know if the people at the beach were a threat to their health or lives or just their privacy.
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They were meant as a menace but I love leaving the thread loose enough to match the reader. Word counts do add a bit of confusion
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I know from how my stories are perceived that there’s more than one way to see what is written.
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i like the way the breeze and surf are personified. is it some sort of tribal dance with torches?
http://ideasolsi65.blogspot.in/2017/06/the-dark-night.html
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I was painting with a wide brush here. My mind was on a secret group, but used what mossy would see as witches. Still the thought of being discovered can ne frightening
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So much for “an isolated beach!” Chilling story but I don’t really know why. Reminded me of some sort of monster at the end. Great story Mark!
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I was going for that out of place feeling with an unknown group realizing you’re not with them. The cooling part maybe a group at such an out of the way place. 😉 Thank you my dear.
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Got to worry when the candled circle changes shape . . . And, I thought they were going skinny dipping . . .
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He probably was hoping that to. I like the image of the circle changing. It has this “oh f” moment to it. I had the idea of the end before the story, so I was working backwards.
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I’ve had that experience — then finding the sdrow ot knil kcab ot eht beginning.
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Good thing I speak sdrawkcab.😉
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Is Bridget or Bill or both about to be sacrificed in some beach ritual with candles? Quite the ominous ending. Nice one.
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Could be. Secluded beaches do hold secrets. Some never get shared. One way or smoother. 😉 Thank youvery much.
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Another fine mess he’s got her into! Great story.
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All the best part of travel…The next horror story to share. Thank you forthe kind words. 😀
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