Demeter’s Tears ComplimentaryPo.em

While orange taloms of dawn scratch at fading moonscape

Demeter’s tears fall like shooting stars

Each droplet a new life founded 

Each droplet new visions seen

Widening landscape of inherrent possibilities 

Probability washes among rainbow beaches

Another commentary po.em from  Lorraine and myself.  Her words are italicIzed.  More of her words are located at http://myfrillyfreudianslip.wordpress.com and http://25wordsmoreorless.wordpress.com

Future Pasts Complimentary Po.em

Days of reckoning, days of glory?

Finish lines in moving sand

Vaulting into hyperspace

Passing future pasts 

Foot race to reason

Across ribbon candy fantasy land

Another commentary po.em from  Lorraine and myself.  Her words are italicIzed.  More of her words are located at http://myfrillyfreudianslip.wordpress.com and http://25wordsmoreorless.wordpress.com

Kindred Spirits – Commentary Po.em

Free to explore each other’s 

Kindred  spirits left unbound

Tastes desire longing to run

Full frontal onslaught, eyes wide

Stolen moments lost in amazement

Touching of souls; touching of faces



Another commentary po.em from  Lorraine and myself.  Her words are italicIzed.  More of her words are located at http://myfrillyfreudianslip.wordpress.com and http://25wordsmoreorless.wordpress.com

Breath -Commentary Po.em 

Breath held in longing

Nervous eyes hoping it’s mutual

Tentative touch of hand

Waiting for return on feelings

Scarred and scared

Calm in distress, Rabid in peace

Go for the throat or heart

Another collaborative effort between Lorraine and myself. Her words are italicized. She can be found at http://myfrillyfreudianslip.wordpress.com and http:25wordsmoreorless.wordpress.com  Please stop by and visit Lorraine.  


Void – Commentary Po.em

Falling in to yesterday 

Eternal quest

Butterfly or moth

Searching for flower or flame

Slipstreams into fact

Tumbling letters break words

Nothing held or possessed 

Like shadows in the dark


Another commentary po.em with words from Lorraine, http://myfrillyfreudenslip.wordpress.com and http://in25wordsmoreorleswordpress.com, and myself.  Her words are in italics.  Please stop by a visit her! 











Missed Chance -Commentary Po.em


In the peripheral vision of your eye

Waving from my attention

Arms out stretched 

Fingers feeling in the air

Like shadows in the dark

Lingering memories pull away

Rushing up and over

Only to crawl and slither

Another commentary po.em collaboration between Lorraine, http://myfrillyfreudianslip.wordpress.com, and myself.  Her words are in italics.  pleas stop by her site and her smaller works at http://in25wordsmoreorless.wordpress.com


Singularity – Commentary Po.em

Moving toward the event horizon

Singularity engulfs everything

Time is an illusion

in a silver of moment ecstasy 

Sleight of hands, smoke and mirrors

Vision tricks sense of touch

Hearing our emotions

fearing our senses

Blessed by torment 

ephemera passing as nostalgia 

Talisman of misfortune

Desperately trying to match breaths 

lost in the cacophony of heartbeat


Another  commentary po.em collaborated with the lovely Lorraine, http://myfrillyfreudianslip.wordpress.com. Her words are italics.   These lines were compiled in comment sections along the way.  

Awash in Clouds

A washed in clouds 

Thunder echoes within

Lightning strobes ‘crossbreeding sky 

Arroyos want to taste their tears

Cracked lips moisten

Emptiness smiles like a vulture

Wheeling overhead

Despondency it’s course

Longing its reason

Regret it’s will

Remote it’s undoing

Commentary poetry by Lorraine and myself.  Her words are italicized.  She has more of them that can be seen at http://myfrillyfreudianslip.wordpress.com 

other examples of commentary po.ems

https://myfrillyfreudianslip.wordpress.com/2017/01/28/conceit-of-lies/

https://project21words.wordpress.com/2017/01/31/tango-for-one/?preview=true