There was a distinct pain, one that tells of bad feelings long held. I arched my back as if that could reduce, relieve the obvious knife plunged deep. Such a kind friendly hand to deal such a blow.
I fade to black in the longest instant in memory. The approaching floor scares me back into the past when things were different. Back when things were simple to me, at least.
A little more
Just, wow! I’m arching along with you, feeling the knife of betrayal in my back. Really good six. Keep it up! I want more!
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Thank you. I’m working on it. One of those flowing ideas. This is as far as it had gone https://any1mark66.wordpress.com/2016/09/24/olivia/?preview=true
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Well done! Thank you. 🐞
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Thank you darling.
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I definitely want to know more about what’s going on! Are you going to continue this? Its a great start.
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I have an idea. There’s a sense of betrayal and love lost. Of course, these are great story ideas. If I wasn’t in the middle of a move, this becomes more. 😀
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I was thinking that or betrayed by a friend….good luck with the move!
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This is intimate type of stuff. Deep visceral feeling. And thanks it’s only 2000 miles, so it should be easy. 😉
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Ok, we are easy to convince to write more. A sample of possible more…. https://any1mark66.wordpress.com/2016/09/24/olivia
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