Breath -Commentary Po.em 

Breath held in longing

Nervous eyes hoping it’s mutual

Tentative touch of hand

Waiting for return on feelings

Scarred and scared

Calm in distress, Rabid in peace

Go for the throat or heart

Another collaborative effort between Lorraine and myself. Her words are italicized. She can be found at and  Please stop by and visit Lorraine.  

Void – Commentary Po.em

Falling in to yesterday 

Eternal quest

Butterfly or moth

Searching for flower or flame

Slipstreams into fact

Tumbling letters break words

Nothing held or possessed 

Like shadows in the dark

Another commentary po.em with words from Lorraine, and, and myself.  Her words are in italics.  Please stop by a visit her! 

Missed Chance -Commentary Po.em

In the peripheral vision of your eye

Waving from my attention

Arms out stretched 

Fingers feeling in the air

Like shadows in the dark

Lingering memories pull away

Rushing up and over

Only to crawl and slither

Another commentary po.em collaboration between Lorraine,, and myself.  Her words are in italics.  pleas stop by her site and her smaller works at

Singularity – Commentary Po.em

Moving toward the event horizon

Singularity engulfs everything

Time is an illusion

in a silver of moment ecstasy 

Sleight of hands, smoke and mirrors

Vision tricks sense of touch

Hearing our emotions

fearing our senses

Blessed by torment 

ephemera passing as nostalgia 

Talisman of misfortune

Desperately trying to match breaths 

lost in the cacophony of heartbeat

Another  commentary po.em collaborated with the lovely Lorraine, Her words are italics.   These lines were compiled in comment sections along the way.  

Awash in Clouds

A washed in clouds 

Thunder echoes within

Lightning strobes ‘crossbreeding sky 

Arroyos want to taste their tears

Cracked lips moisten

Emptiness smiles like a vulture

Wheeling overhead

Despondency it’s course

Longing its reason

Regret it’s will

Remote it’s undoing

Commentary poetry by Lorraine and myself.  Her words are italicized.  She has more of them that can be seen at 

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