A washed in clouds
Thunder echoes within
Lightning strobes ‘crossbreeding sky
Arroyos want to taste their tears
Cracked lips moisten
Emptiness smiles like a vulture
Wheeling overhead
Despondency it’s course
Longing its reason
Regret it’s will
Remote it’s undoing
Commentary poetry by Lorraine and myself. Her words are italicized. She has more of them that can be seen at http://myfrillyfreudianslip.wordpress.com
other examples of commentary po.ems
https://myfrillyfreudianslip.wordpress.com/2017/01/28/conceit-of-lies/
https://project21words.wordpress.com/2017/01/31/tango-for-one/?preview=true
Coloring Outside the Lines 
Brilliant picture and your poem superbly moulded within itself.
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Many thanks. Our collaborations are becoming like and hand and glove
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Great
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Perfect melding of our thoughts and comments. Picture is splendid! Going to reblog.
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I found this looking for something else. The out of focus feel really fits the piece. 😊
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Reblogged this on Lorraine's frilly freudian slip and commented:
More commentary po.etry created in comment stream between Mark and myself.
This is quite addicting — you should try it.
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