PHOTO PROMPT © J Hardy Carroll
“The body is inside, it’s on the left! It’s wrapped in old clothes. Grey crazy hair…..the skin is very…weird.” Glen smiles that half smile of false confidence.
Sammy looks at his friend. He’s scared to death of dead things. But he’s three days older, more mature, closer to thirteen. “Who is it? You saw the face right?”
Glen taller and sharp jet black spiked hair emphasizes with body language, a definite no. “Look come see it yourself! You want to know who it is so bad. You? You’re scared. Son of a bitch, you’re scared!”
“I got more balls than you. I’ll go take a selfie with it!” Sammy is up and marching. No younger kids will make a fool out of him.
“A mannequin who throws a mannequin in a haunted house!” Sammy yells out.
Nearby a friend laughs uncontrollably.
Written as part of a challenge called Friday fictioneers, https://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com
Great characterization here – and wonderfully written – you’ve captured the essence of the tension and testing of teenage friendships.
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Thank you for the kind words. I remember those days somehow. 😉
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Ha! A dummy…great story! The visuals and dialogue work well.
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Thank you. It was creepier with the mannequin somehow.
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Good trick. I think the guy who went in to take a selfie with the body, thought there was actually a body. Great write!
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Thank you darling. I liked the selfie with this. I would imagine a dead body picture gets on utube
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I love it, these kids have a great voice. And Sammy is brave, even if it’s for a selfie.
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In the modern day, that’s how you would have to prove you seen something. I actually love writing about this age with boys. They are so much in two worlds without any idea or plan. Just living day to day
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Mannequins are pretty creepy, too!
Great story! Nicely built-up sense of foreboding and tension – that nice let-down at the end comes as a relief.
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Mannequins found in a abandoned building are super creepy. They just didn’t walk there on their own! 😉
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Yup. 🙂
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Ha.. I love it.. bodies can be scary… but mannequins are not.
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Once you know they’re mannequins. 😉
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To look at the world through children’s eyes…your story made me smile, thank you!
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You’re very welcome. Children have it made. Too bad most rush the childhood to the paradise of adulthood.
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Great humorous story
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Thank you very much. It had a playful scary look. Boys seemed like best characters for it.
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Nicely done story..though I think you meant you’re scared and than you..unless that was part of the dialogue. 🙂
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Thank you for catching those. They were in need of fixing. Much appreciated😀
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No problem! That’s what we’re here for 🙂
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😀
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A very strong spin on the prompt – believable dialogue and characters. It’s a dark pic, making us all write dark stories, I think 🙂
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Yep creepy dark places reach into the closet of fears. I would think there’s a few happy stories, there’s one of those people in every crowd. 😉
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Haha! Yeah, I’m afraid i’m not one of those – if I can see creepy potential, I’ll exploit it 🙂
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Be true to your inner demons, that’s my motto.
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And a wise motto at that 🙂
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They know where I sleep. Actually, they can take away that sleep.
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🙂
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Yup, we gotta have that selfie for proof!
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New way is always right. Barnum and Bailey made a long living with this thought.
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This is quite visual and modern feeling. Good to read.
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Thank you very much. I appreciate the kind words.😀
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