Walking Away


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Written as part of a challenge called Flash Fiction for the Purposeful Practitioner,  details found at http://rogersship.WordPress.com

“Enough is enough!”  I look back at my nemesis.

My eyes lock dead.   My will prevents blinking.   My scowl concrete.  

“You will not beat me!”  My voice echoes down a vacant roadway.

I turn away.   No more last looks. No more trying to understand why.   The point of no return with this wreck.  Why I chose to think things would get better, remains a mystery.  

Hoping for the best is easy in good times.   The last straw sucked hope out of the picture. I’m on my own.   The open road and what I have on my back. 

Sounds call me from behind.   It sounds of broken glass.   Shrill high pitched.   Demanding my attention like so many times before.   Every time it less to a let down.  My heart bruised.   My conscious put to sleep early today.  Maybe tomorrow I’ll think about her.

A red car burns on a deserted road.   Almost no-one notices.

19 thoughts on “Walking Away

  1. Loved the intensity… and all the confusion about what you might have metaphorically meant. I wonder sometimes when we read great pieces of literature, if we are assuming far more in the works than the authors originally intended? Enjoyed! So glad you could participate this week. Hope to hear from you in Week #5.

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  2. I liked tour story it was interesting. It didn’t occur to me the red car was a woman. That’s very metaphorical. Personification I think too. Horrible to have a person burn. But maybe, the guy really loved his car and things weren’t working anymore. Great job!

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  3. Somehow we always think things will get better, too often we invest too much emotion, energy and finance into something we know we should break from. I enjoyed your writing.


  4. I know I’m probably way of the mark here, but when I read it, first thing I though was: this is about a guy and his broken-down car that caught fire in the middle of nowhere. But it would work equally well with a woman. 🙂

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    1. Apparently that is a common thought here. But I guess I’ll go with we give our cars human traits. So I failing car/relationship do have breakdowns. It’s just more complicated when you set another person on fire.

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    1. I was going for the car pushing him over the edge. I was building it as a relationship between people. Without mentioning another person. If the emotional tie weighed that strong, I did well. 🙂 thanks my dear.

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