Photo Credit: Louise, with The Storyteller’s Abode
Written as part of a weekly challenge, Flash Fiction for Aspiring writers, https://flashfictionforaspiringwriters.wordpress.com/
“Look at it! Clearly it’s one. Any idiot can tell you. I don’t know why you can’t see it.” Bernie points at the seaweed covered mass at their feet.
“You, sir, are an idiot! They don’t exist. They never existed! The sea rolled up a bunch of garbage and spit it out.” Oliver pushes up his glasses. And gives his fifty year friend the look.
“Ok explain the green skin. Come on wise one.” Bernie put his right hand on his hip to emphasize the point.
“Algae. Boy that was a tough one.” Oliver retorts.
“And the fin? Horizontal fins are mammals!”
Bernie states.
“Oh, well she is a mermaids then.” Oliver shugs
Loved the characters arguing back and forth. Good story. 🙂
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Once in awhile dialogue is easy. Thanks for the kind words
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Great story, loved the ending! 🙂
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Thank you darling. Much better to have characters do the work of describing things. 😀
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Yes definitely! 🙂
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interesting debate!!
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Fish have vertical tails, mammals have horizontal tails. Pretty simple, but the body laying in the surf seems rather boring over all. Doesn’t it?
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Great dialogue – it’s a bit like Statler and Waldorf 😀
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Contrary conversations are easy because the other can feed details back. Even if the image builds slowly.
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And they keep the reader interested, wondering what these people are arguing about 🙂
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That’s what you hope happens. 🙂
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Haha. I thought they were arguing about whether she was a mermaid or not. I like the image you created of two elderly men bickering back and forth to one another. I don’t think they actually found a mermaid but to their reasoning they did. Great job as always.
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Thank you. I figured it would better for them to argue over a mythical creature than let them discover it. It was the most fun I could have in about one hundred words. You are too kind darling.😀
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You’re most welcome 🙂
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😀
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I love it! Great build up through the story and the wonderful twist at the end that it’s a mermaid! Great story!
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I had the mermaids idea. Just had to think of how best to reveal her. Thanks darling. :-D. It even linked on first try!
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Great story! Glad you didn’t have problems linking up this time!
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😀
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